英语社团面试有个自我介绍，大家看看我写的有没有什么问题

这是啥社团，为啥自我介绍一大半都讲缺点
看最后的意思是个“love english”的社团，那为啥不讲讲你看啥英文书/剧/电影/游戏，什么的

个人感觉，介绍自己就跟企业面试一样，缺点应一笔带过，说多了对自己没什么帮助，另外，既然自己有这些缺点，那么应该是自己会更努力融入群体与大家交流而不是欢迎其他人来找自己交流。。。

我再改改吧,一不小心就当成日记写了

大学的妹子一点意思都没有

从第三句开始都可以不要，可以讲一些自己的兴趣爱好这些
不过可以看出来，题主有当领导的天赋

but also 不能单独用。
虽然口语中表现不出来但逗号连接的两个句子要有连词。
不要在自我介绍中过多宣扬自己的负面特点，尤其是自己不善交流方面，尤其是初次见面的自我介绍，否则后果就不说了，除非是个萌妹子否则强调自己不会聊天什么的已经开始尴尬了。。
Thanks everyone to join this corporation，这句话你不是去面试的吗，我不知道这么讲对不对。
blush好像没有形容词用法，可以说 shy boy / bashful person， 非要强调脸红可以说 blush easily。

另外似乎有些短。可以插入一些为什么自己喜欢英语，和自己学英语的趣事在里面。

推荐一个给你吧，绝对好使：

My name is xxx, I'm an artist, I'm a performance artist. I'm hired for people to fulfill their fantasies, their deep dark fantasies. I was gonna be a movie star y'know, modeling and acting. After a hundred and two auditions and small parts I decided y'know I had enough, Then I got in to Escort world....

加个社团而已还能不通过的吗？

改成I’m a boy next door under 18

什么社团还搞面试，不是都该求着你加入才对吗…

Hi everyone, my name is xxx. I'm a xxth grade student and I'm here today because I want to join you guys in this awesome English club.

Besides the very basic information, there is also something else about me that I would like to share. Personally, I think my curly hair and my freckles are two of the most recognizable features on me. So if you are not good at remembering faces, I hope knowing this could be helpful. Also, I won't call myself a very open person as I do sometimes feel anxious when communicating with strangers. But my shyness never prevents me from being an English Lover or a good friend. So if you want to talk about English or just randomly chat with me, you are always more than welcomed to do so.

Anyways, I do believe we will have a great time in this club even though I'm not in yet. Thank you all for listening and I hope you have a good rest of your day.

（拿好不谢，交出20铜）
临时随便写的，可以随意参考一下，希望对你有所帮助。
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